what do you guys think? asian fan-fiction?

Your description is terrific and very captivating. According to your description I'm guessing that this particular fan fiction is based on vampires or whatever creatures that belong in the blood feasting section of mythology. If you did meant for the title to be titled "Forbitten Love" then I think it's intelligent as it matches the description. For-bitten like a Vampire biting into its victim's flesh. But if you meant to spell "Forbidden" which is the correct way to spell it then you should edit the title. ^^ Otherwise for foreword it's great although you should have just kept their names instead of telling their positions. A great author should be able to introduce their character's positions throughout the story. Not that I'm assuming that you aren't a great author (you gave me a cliffhanger with the snippet of the story in your description and I loved it very much) but it's best not to reveal their positions so readers can have something not to expect. But you can leave it as is to your desired liking. But it's a terrific fan fiction and I wish the most luck for you! You've gain a subscriber keke. :)

Sounds really good (: by the way I love exo<3