Can you hold your breath underwater very long? Can you improve this poem? Please read Casket Diving?

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C.C. and/or comments are welcome.   Most my poems are fiction basked on fact.  Can you guess the one fact in this poem?  There is a short "Authors Note" after the poem that I felt was needed to explain a couple points in the poem.  As always, I thank you and appreciate your answers and stars.  Thomas
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Casket Diving

My record; three minutes, twenty one seconds
Hold breath underwater success no fail
Swam competitively as each lung beckons
Win underwater we now take to sail

We all play the game or you are a loser
Sweeping the coastline finding shipwreck to start 
Takes five minutes down under for end user
Longest time ever tried to stop our heart

That’s right, this is a game called Casket Diving
We’re a group of twelve beautiful love flowers
We keep living, but death our friend driving
Following rota surviving empowers

If you join us you may end up team mascot
Give us all you have you won’t need them no more
Object of game find submerged treasure casket
Return to the surface alive and you score

Determining winner depends on your time
The longer it takes to ascend the better
Bibelot and measure jocund and sublime
Today’s my turn hope to be record setter

.....And live another day
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Authors Note:

S4, L2 there is a double negative that is improper
English.  However, to some, it is not, so I decided
to make it part of this piece.  Plus, it rhymed.

Rota

For this group of kids, rota became somewhat of a 
Cult for them.  The ideal of performance and work
was abused and turned into a suicidal experiment.
See definition of rota.

Casket Diving

When the group would go diving each time, they would
call their game a different name. In this case, the
shipwreck was the actual Casket. Those who could hold 
their breath an estimated five (5) minutes to return to
the top and live competed for the victory based on who
had the longest time and the coolest treasure absconded 
from the shipwreck. Each person was giving a snorkeling 
gear, which included a flashlight, and they also were given
a knife. No flippers. If a person did not make it back,
they were weighted down with rocks and taken back down 
to the bottom of the coastal sea and left in the shipwreck
(the Casket).
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Glossary

rota- noun: roster of names showing order which people should perform certain duties
bibelot- noun:  object: a trinket
jocund- adjective: full of or showing high-spirited joy

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♥Haters♥ ♥Are♥ ♥My♥ ♥Motivators♥ · Accepted Answer

Thats soo long to hold a person's breath. I can hold it for about 42 seconds, and then breathing hard after doing that. I like the poem as well, I think you'd become a great poet one day (: And Thanks for the feedback and support on my questions!

Geminisinger · Answer

A very scary pastime! I won't snorkel in water over twenty five feet anymore.Florida now has white sharks too! Found a six sided brass nail in 3 feet of water after a hurricane. It shined in the light and at first I thought it was gold! It is from an old ship I guess.

Roann · Answer

Lovely!
Last year we went swiming in a river. There were mango trees growing on its banks. My small wonder was lucky to see a mango fall plop! into the river. Of course, we all began diving for it.  It was dark and reedy but we didn't let go and found that mango after a good 15minutes of solid breath holding. Shared among the 3 of us, no mango has tasted sweeter.  : )

THE BANNIBAL ONE · Answer

As long as the yellow submarine has air possibly a month.
I can't improve it even though it seems to be about a ficticous lover.
And the break up that follows signified by the casket.
casket,basket,mask it,  Ryhmezone is wrong.
comet..vomit,,,dung..hung..wipe,tripe.
dump...hump...thats all I can do to improve this novel.
byeeexxx , you're welcome

doe · Answer

Were you a competitive swimmer? I like this poem it's terrifying to think of the game because I am fearful of water but the poem was an interesting and enjoyable read for an armchair adventurer like me.

Hope Leslie Shy · Answer

Mascot doesn't really rhyme with casket.

The longest I could stay underwater is thirty seconds, and I can't swim very deep at all.

Jojo · Answer

Ah, the things we do to test our own mortality (and we always fail in the end)
 I would not be caught dead doing that, given that I have a major fear of drowning. But oh well, whatever floats your boat I guess...

Lapiz Dominoes. · Answer

I read this, enjoyeed the agog of it, as a metaphor.
I`ll have to think lots more about it.
Enough to say that as a metphor it`s excellent and I quit judging halfway through
and got to assess it instead.
I hadn`t come across `bibelot` before and have a strong case of the
`Hmmm..mm..!` s.

8.5/ 10.

Hmmm..mm..

lovechild · Answer

Just watch out for those dang sinkholes. A nice poem about challenges, personal as well as interactive.

? · Answer

That sounds like an awesome experience.
I remember diving for the rubber brick at the deep-end of the pool.

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