Can you hold your breath underwater very long? Can you improve this poem? Please read Casket Diving?

C.C. and/or comments are welcome. Most my poems are fiction basked on fact. Can you guess the one fact in this poem? There is a short "Authors Note" after the poem that I felt was needed to explain a couple points in the poem. As always, I thank you and appreciate your answers and stars. Thomas

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Casket Diving

My record; three minutes, twenty one seconds

Hold breath underwater success no fail

Swam competitively as each lung beckons

Win underwater we now take to sail

We all play the game or you are a loser

Sweeping the coastline finding shipwreck to start

Takes five minutes down under for end user

Longest time ever tried to stop our heart

That’s right, this is a game called Casket Diving

We’re a group of twelve beautiful love flowers

We keep living, but death our friend driving

Following rota surviving empowers

If you join us you may end up team mascot

Give us all you have you won’t need them no more

Object of game find submerged treasure casket

Return to the surface alive and you score

Determining winner depends on your time

The longer it takes to ascend the better

Bibelot and measure jocund and sublime

Today’s my turn hope to be record setter

.....And live another day

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Authors Note:

S4, L2 there is a double negative that is improper

English. However, to some, it is not, so I decided

to make it part of this piece. Plus, it rhymed.

Rota

For this group of kids, rota became somewhat of a

Cult for them. The ideal of performance and work

was abused and turned into a suicidal experiment.

See definition of rota.

Casket Diving

When the group would go diving each time, they would

call their game a different name. In this case, the

shipwreck was the actual Casket. Those who could hold

their breath an estimated five (5) minutes to return to

the top and live competed for the victory based on who

had the longest time and the coolest treasure absconded

from the shipwreck. Each person was giving a snorkeling

gear, which included a flashlight, and they also were given

a knife. No flippers. If a person did not make it back,

they were weighted down with rocks and taken back down

to the bottom of the coastal sea and left in the shipwreck

(the Casket).

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Glossary

rota- noun: roster of names showing order which people should perform certain duties

bibelot- noun: object: a trinket

jocund- adjective: full of or showing high-spirited joy

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