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was this well writing?
At approximately 11:00pm on April 4, 2013 I informed Security Guard Bird to wear his Security Uniform properly. Officer Bird had on a long blue button up sleeve shirt that was covering his security Uniform shirt. I also informed Officer about LOBC POST ORDERS. Security Officer stated “that his Supervisor saw him already with the long blue button up sleeve shirt, and it was not a problem, so is not a big deal S/O refuses to worn uniforms properly.
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- 8 years agoFavorite Answer
There are several things you could improve:
1. Use 'instructed' rather than 'informed'.
2. Rather than 'long blue button up sleeve shirt ', write, 'blue long sleeve, button up shirt'. (It would make more sense that way)
3. Write, 'informed Officer of' instead of, 'informed Officer about'.
4. You have omitted the quotation marks at the end of the last sentence.
- Anonymous8 years ago
For a start "Is this writing good?", OR "Have I expressed myself well?" Your question looks very odd!
"....I told (or 'requested', definitely not 'informed')....to wear his uniform....
"Officer Bird refuses to wear his uniform correctly." (new sentence, full stop (period) after "...it is not a big deal.")
- Anonymous8 years ago
Seems ok. The only thing i can correct is "refuses to wear" not worn.
