This sonnet needs direction, but I can't see where to change it. Are you able to?

Oddly, the first seven lines are very good. Not wed strikes an odd tone which would be alright but it feels like you lost the thread. The later lines are vague, trite and awkward (not rhythmically, but semantically.) The couplet sounds like a suicide wish.

Nice to see you around though.

As this is your artistic expression, my comments are really only based on my interpretation of how i experience reality, and are not criticisms of the words you have chosen to express yours.

The first set of (4) lines are cohesive and work together to set the tone for the whole poem. The reader is pulled in and can easily relate to the mood and tone you are setting.

The second set contains elements that i feel grate against one another. It is hard to find the right way to use contrast to express a feeling without it diminishing the emotional impact of your intended purpose.

the harshness of "bluish lips, cold, hurt" ... those words don't really blend well with the comforting warmth of "the down of a deep feathery bed"

the word "like" is unnecessary in the last line of the second set. they aren't like lovers, they are lovers. The use of the word "celebrate" also comes too quick after the harsh chill of the previous lines.

These 3 themes i feel are too opposing to be used meaningfully in the space of 4 lines. Each of these themes could fit together cohesively if each were given a few more lines of expression and a natural feeling segue to connect them.

I don't know if i understand what you mean exactly in the third set. You say your affair is a secret form your respective spouses, but you follow that with implying they really do know and just pretending that they don't know the truth. Maybe if you used the idea of feigned ignorance to describe the action of everyone it would express better the bitterness and tragedy of the situation.

Those are just my opinions, only you can truly judge the accuracy of what you are trying to express. I freely admit I could be completely wrong. You have natural talent, hone your innate ability and you will be a true artist.

I do see that lips and flip do not rime. Also, how about the woman (I believe you are describing what a woman thinks) has killed the man herself by accident (a joy without the sorrow (if sorrow means grief)).

And she thinks about a life without the sorrow of having killed the man, and can live on without him, maybe finding true love (A new soul finds my heart, etc.).

I walk along the cliffs of the sea side is much better wording

This poem is excellent and the author gives me joy just by her presence.

Thank you sharing your new writing and I don't feel you need to change one word. Its awesome how your able to put deep feelings into words! Bravo!