"Sonnet 207" How should you feel about lost love? Care to C/C?

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Sonnet 208

Promise me not forever for tonight,
Remind me not a thing from yesterday,
Today has joys for us both to delight,
And places where we will feel best to be;
Pledge to me not the future yet to come,
Nor blessings held on oath by swearing lips,
So I’ll be spared the frustration and glum,
Should your heart turns out to be one that gyps;
Your side of Heaven wants nothing more,
But where I am, of Heaven it’s bereft,
And the few stars that in the blue would store,
Have grouped themselves that all alone I’m left;
……..But should tomorrow I wake up alone,
……..I’ll still remember how your eyes have shone.

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Thomas · Accepted Answer

Sir Questor

Not your best, but some lines (phrases) were breathtakingly
sensual.  Aroused in deep thought was I.

Some of the lines, at least to me, do not run in iambic pentameter
e.g. line 1:

Promise me not forever for tonight,

the first word, 'Promise' starts out trochiac with a 
stressed/unstressed  PROM-ise......needs an unstressed syllable
to start each line, maybe this would work:

"must PRO-mise NOT for-EV-er NOT to-NIGHT"

Most of lines are fine, but you usually are spot on bro, so don't know
if you wrote this fast or this is a different style sonnet.  I am here to
learn man.

Line 5 >>>  Pledge to me not the future yet to come------
is same as L1, first word and syllable is stressed,  How bout:

"so PLEDGE me NOT the FUT-ure YET to COME"

okay

Keep up the great work bro Q

? · Answer

Live for today for you never know what the next day will bring,or even if you'll be there to experience it.That is close to a biblical passage,but don't know where it is to quote it to you.I cannot comment on structure because I don't know enough about it.This write is a bit 'dark' compared to your usual fare.

Wallah Lies · Answer

I like it! It's very sad. That a lost poet with all emotions that has for her.

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