Interview question "tell me about your self" is this a good answer?

Hi

I've not had a lot of interviews and would like your help to get the answer for the above question right.

my company has ranks for promotions e.g. - rank 1, rank 2, rank 3.

I'm a rank 2 at the moment and will be applying for a rank 3. I wrote the below answer and would like you to have a read and tell me how I can improve it. wasn't sure if I should mention that I worked in construction. I needed a flexible job as I was taken care of my mom at the time and in that job it was 1 day contract each day and I could leave and come back at anytime.

I'm also not sure if I provided enough details in the answer. the job is an MI analyst role, where we have to gather information about different processes, see how much work is coming in and how many colleague hey will need, if they are out of deadline or not. and we will also be supporting other teams of simplifying the way they do this, e.g. using excel formula, VBA code, etc..

below is my answer and Thanks your for taking the time to read it and respond: