"Unsure" another poem?

She is clever
Yet she has never
Been sure of herself
Doubt in her eyes
A fault in her confident disguise
The doubt in her eyes

2008-02-28T16:12:36Z

Its a bit choppy and needs a little more critiquing but aside from that. Whatcha think?

Lady C2008-02-28T16:17:20Z

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It has a nice flow. The only thing I would do is add some more verses between the two lines "Doubt in her eyes and The doubt in her eyes. It a great poem nontheless.

-closed-2008-02-28T16:51:34Z

I agree with the first person. Right now as I read it, it sounds strange hearing the same line so close like that. Maybe adding some lines in between?