You'd think that people would have had enough of silly sad poems?

Are sad poems as prevalent in poetry as love songs are in music?

Well I for one have had enough! Let's get happy people! If only for a little while.... What do you think of my poem?


Ipanema….

The name alone
puts a Jobim bounce in my step
The boardwalk’s alive
but no see no hot papis yet
The pink thong bikini
is an invitation to stare
But the only accepts
are flabby men with too much hair
No matter, no matter
I enjoy their warm pervy grins
And how the sun’s juicy lips
leaves lipstick sweat on my skin
And how my Skol’s crispy taste
brings out the beach’s fuzzy glow
Like the sunshine on the ocean
swimming in the tide’s ebb and flow

Brazil! Brazil! I love Brazil!
Capoeira on sand
Havaianas on feet
Bronze on body
Romance on tongue
I’m melting! I’m melting! From the bliss of it all!
I’ll be a puddle for sure
if I live here for good
Better get back on the plane
And stay solid in the States


I probably should have stayed with the same form throughout, but I just got too excited, I couldn't help but break out of it!!! Is that forgiveable?

^glen^magnific^ ^mufflerdent^2009-07-27T07:56:31Z

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See how they run
Camouflaged Planet
Blocked by the Sun


Whippin Post
Holy Goast
Muffin Toast

axe kick
broke .....
nevermind, sick

Yours is better.

Daphne2016-04-10T09:34:06Z

Try to use structure in your poems so they are better. Like: The princess and her prince" She wanders alone in the night, Wishing to find her handsome prince, She searches for hours but he is nowhere in sight, She longs to get her true loves kiss, She runs through the trees, She explores the beach, He isnt in his castle so where could he be? Maybe he is too far out of reach, Sad and hurt she goes back home. Great poems, I would say it is a 10/10.

Anonymous2009-07-27T12:06:07Z

No no, it was absolutely riveting. I'm excited now too! Haha. I want to go some place hot with hot bodies and sweat and music and romance and tongues.

Thank you!

Mike H Music Man in New Orleans2009-07-27T10:19:45Z

Sounds like you are having fun - Nice poem

Anonymous2009-07-27T10:50:02Z

Waltzing Matilda is better any day, hands down.

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