Having trouble writing a thesis statement?

it is for a descriptive essay. i am going to write about going on a missions trip after hurricane katrina to help rebuild houses and describe the wreckage i saw. any suggestions?

Mercy2012-09-29T18:37:52Z

Hurricane Katrina was the deadliest and most destructive Atlantic hurricane of the 2005 Atlantic hurricane season. It was the costliest natural disaster, as well .


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clepper2016-10-24T13:59:06Z

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