How about a little ramblin'?

Heya Andrew....Ahhh vegas. Good depiction of what fates may offer.

Ain't no ramblin' in this [purposeful& truthful] write, Andy. Push afew lines and pull a few, and you'll get a fine lyric for a country song. The man in black would 'v appreciated a subject and lines like these.

a boozer come loser

your poem no snoozer

tragedy in error done

losing the fairer one

watch as it comes undone

dropping the soap won't be fun

so get a grip before you slip

and flip to your last trip

I like the poem..why does he go to jail?..poor guy. I assume this is autobiographical? This is better poetry than most I read on here. Sad though.

It has the advantage of a serious subject matter to give irony to the cutsey rhymes. I think it works.

I really liked this poem even though it was a sad tale and it sounds like some of the bad luck; i always have..

sounds like a big problem

Fun writing. Interesting and creative. Enjoyed it a lot. Thanks for sharing.