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I wrote a poem today. Tell me, what do you think?

"Rivers Run Red”

We are made in his image.

That’s what they say.

From our kind hearts,

To our violent ways.

We show our love,

our passion, our hate.

We even destroy the very

Things we create.

Whether it be machine,

A home,

Or the children we name.

Even the lives we make

In search of some fame.

All left in the dust

Of the riots that rage

In the streets we called home.

And we just look away.

We wage war on your brothers.

Our rivers run red.

As our children fight our battles.

It’s their blood that is shed.

It’s their lives that are lost

Because of mistakes in the past.

It’s their lives that are lost

Because of one name heard so vast.

In gods name we “pray.”

As we wait for the day.

As we wait for our questions

To be answered.

As we wait for our answers

Too many lives are lost.

Enough waiting,

I say,

It’s all a lost cause.

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  • 1 decade ago
    Favorite Answer

    its nice!! you should do more,i tell you! :P hehe xx

  • Anonymous
    4 years ago

    this could properly be a properly built piece of paintings yet ought to I advise what may be a reasonable progression to the pass of the words? try making stanzas 4 5 and six have first lines with out better than 4 words. this will additionally provide the poen some 'facet' yet nevertherless this is a superb poem. Congrats

  • Lyla
    Lv 4
    1 decade ago

    This is a great poem. Well put together. I'm gonna feel so dumb if these are lyrics or something.

  • 1 decade ago

    its beautiful, but you lost your rhyming scheme a little towards the end

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  • 1 decade ago

    Nice

    better than me

  • 1 decade ago

    i like it, ever thought of publishing your poems? great way to make extra money

  • 1 decade ago

    Beautiful :)

  • 1 decade ago

    It's good.

  • 1 decade ago

    Nice!!! :)

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