mmmmm fishsticks

It's not how we act around others, but how we act when we are alone that reflects who we truly are.

thanks!

Every day and night,

Through thick and thin,

Feeling like i lost, couldn’t win,

Then you came along and made things right,

Making my future, seem big and bright.

Now i enjoy life and feel really fine,

You truly are my sunshine.

Broken hearts, broken dreams,

They’re just some things that love brings.

Whenever you learn that it’s all a lie, you’ll cry.

Sure, it could be a bIg mistake;

Just learn from it, for your own sake.

You find out nothing hurts like love,

Nothing brings your heart so much pain.

So sick and tired, just wanna’ get out of this game.

You added flame to this game,

When I met you, When you came.

From that point on, in any case;

It will never be the same, nothing can ever replace.

What you made out of me, What I became.

I didn't write this by myself. I wrote this with -that special someone- in 8th grade. (she wrote most of it!) i just wanted to share it. :)

you can critique/comment if you want~ you might get ten points! x) (though i don't think you should care for meaningless points)

the poems that i've posted earlier, i'd be happy if you critiqued those though! :) or at least read themm ^^

http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;_ylt=Ambbc...

http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;_ylt=AqcXG...

http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;_ylt=Aqtyt...

Follow The Tree (Can You think of a better title?)

'ey, so what is real is up to you,

So dont change by others, just be “true”.

Don’t change because of them, the rest,

Change to be better, not for him, but for them; for the best.

Don’t ever believe it all, don’t be naïve,

Even doubt this poem; don’t you, want to succeed?

If life was perfect, you wouldn’t be you,

Life would be pointless, nothing worth to do.

What is grace, what is kind,

Show it to all, don’t get confined.

Just know If others act poorly, trying to be cool,

They are really nothing, just being a bunch of bull.

You are who you are, that promising tree,

Trim, don’t cut, and just know-

~

Whether fast or slow, just grow, just grow.

ANY critique/thoughts/advice is appreciated! :)

&read/compliment/give advice for my other poems i've posted if you want^^

http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;_ylt=AqcXG...

http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;_ylt=Aqtyt...

im nothing great, nothing exceptional,

i always see that, you are the better.

you have great friends, while i lost mine,

‘cause i was stupid, while you were so kind.

me, being just so “smart”, thats dumb.

i left you out, even tho i thought you were the one.

you, played smart, and made life fun.

i was an idiot, so i had none.

of course itll mean, us wont ever be “we”

all because of stupid ol’ me,

but its okay, for the fun and memories you left behind,

at least all of that, is forever mine.

even tho i wrote this so long ago,

i feel you will forever have that glow.

~

you’re like a booger,

i'd pick you.

i hope you liked it! :)

and can you read this other poem i wrote :) and give some tips or compliments as well :D

http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;_ylt=AuF_f...

its depressing to see superficial people, here, there, all around us,

disregarding others, doing nothing, wasting away, stirring meaningless fuss:

~but it’s not their fault.

we all fight our own battles, everyday; whether arduous or child's play;

clearly showing that jeering at their “identity” just isn’t the way.

not all our days are full of sunshine and smiles aglow,

in which we each have had our ample share of woe.

but what caused us to not give up, comply with our thoughts of ending the relentless affliction?

the positives! like hope, family, and friends, entices the grin.

maybe someday, soon hopefully, through the small acts of kindness and compassion,

may they come to realize, the importance of true friendship, over ephemeral things, like the “current” fashion.

i hope you liked it. :)

critique por favorr, and any advice would be nice!

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